kurosakka

Here's a edited version I made a fe days after posting it

This is a story my friend wrote about his life and what he's going through. Scorpion’s Sting Every night as I lay down I think of what could have been ...

Are you talking about the dark side of love. I feel that your poems are vague and not very cohesive for a series. I think when you edit it have ...

I think your poem is about a teacher who just wants to be loved but she can't find. So now she is bitter and takes it out on her students. ...

Your story intrigues me I wonder what happened that lead to someone commiting murder. You make wonder what happened. I might even write my own ending to just learn what ...

Your imagery is very strong and I am really engrossed with your character's thoughts. But your ending is ambigous but it is a fitting ending to your story. I hope ...

I enjoyed the story but I would like to say that it's too short. You could expand the story into about five pages. I think you could give us some ...

This is about a man looking back at his ironic past and the choices he made to fight for the peace that he fanatically believes in.