kschencker

Well, I don't know much about poetry, so I can't give any good advice as to the poem itself. However, I really liked this poem. It's very mature, and it's ...

A very good story, although there were a few errors here and there. I noticed that you sometimes have trouble with adjectives. Here's what I mean: While houses lined the ...

Hm. Well, I think you've got the basics for a cute story here, but it needs a little touching up. The first few lines are a little confusing. Try saying ...