krazykoreandevil

good description and well paced. 1 major problem that's not too major. comma in between two adjectives. ;) It was a beautiful dawn. The morning sun was drifting up lazily ...

umm...good story i think. is it a novel? because if it is... well... it's very fast paced, a little too fast. things are going way too fast if it's going ...

overall excellent story. The first chapter is kinda short however. The first chapter is filled with wonderous description, but some gramatical mistakes. Marty, Chases oldest brother ran up to him. ...

VERY nice. besides the few grammar mistakes, it is very good, since i have a taste for pirates. However, there are some mistakes. After describing something once, you don't have ...