khaliath

Thank you both. I'm glad you like it. I'm actually revising it, putting the first review into consideration to expand on it - when it's done I'll put it up ...

I agree, I definitely should have submitted this into the lyrics section, but I didn't realize it was there until it was already submitted. Sorry for the mistake. I also ...

Thank you!

I don’t mean to cut in line, But I got something to say. With all these people talkin’ at you, It’s hard to find my place. I can’t do this ...

This story started out strong, but along the way I got a little lost. You slipped out of the past tense and into the present tense when Gale is walking ...

So, just a little introduction into this poem here...I realize I have a repeating verse, but when I write the words just seem to come to me more as a ...

This is a good one for sure. I really like your choice of language and description, I could clearly see the circumstances you were writing about and that's the idea ...

This is a little bare for me, but probably because my work tends to be overly liguistic - I like more flow. The poem seems a little short for the ...

Other than the odd grammar mistake and missed word, I truly think that this is beautifully written. Your words seem to flow well together, except for the mentioned mistakes that ...