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Hey DiannePan, This is really good! It is really dark and mysterious and I love the suspense. I have a few nitpicks: The first sentence The moon’s skin was tightly ...

Holy moly, that is good! Please tell me you have more to this. So suspenseful, great imagery, the warning. Draws the reader right in. I have one single nitpick: Have ...

Your descriptions are breathtaking. You definitely have a talent for that. But, you have a few mistakes, so here goes the nitpicks: In a small village called Cairna, strange events ...

Hey Gladius, this first chapter is great! It's really exciting and mysterious. Also, you some how managed to mix modern with old. Your writing was perfect except for one thing ...

Wow cammie, This story is excellent and sad. I don't have any nitpicks but I want to point out one thing. Whenever I got mad at her, she just smiled ...

I love the story, it's really great. I have a few nitpicks. … Another normal day where arguments, I don't understand what you're saying here. Maybe a typo? [quote=]He looked ...

This is great! I think all the descriptions are wonderful. I did notice that you accidentally wrote exciting or excited as exiting or exited. Other than that, this is beautiful. ...