kathydacat

Thanks for the crits! I was hoping to make the first part the chorus, and the verses to follow the same pattern, but then I had horrible block and couldn't ...

Thank you very much!

What are you watching? What can you see? Beyond the mountains Beyond the sea Can you see a land? Where you can be free? A special place To only be? ...

Wow! I really liked this! There's not much I can say as how to improve it, but it's also good to know what you've done well. I liked the repetition ...

I liked the way this piece was almost poetry, and the way it flowed was rather beautiful. The grammar sounds fine, and the imagery is very well done. The only ...

I liked the repetition of 'For those lost souls', but ti doesn't quite work in the first part of the last stanza, but I have no idea how re-do it, ...

Late, after everyone ele has posted ;-P. I liked this, but I think if you used 'each' instead of 'every' on your third? stanza it would flow better. Title? Perhaps ...