kater_314

So this is what I saw. In the first paragraph where it talks about the Gods , that g should really be uncapitalized. I don't know maybe it's me...but I'm ...

oh, why did you stop like that? uh... I'm not too good with the editing and stuff let me see....umm... maybe add a little more discriptions? Like about the scenery ...

Ooh, interesting...considering that the other people covered all i was going to say, i'll continue to part three. After all there's no use repeating, WHAT ARE THEY?

Yeah, I think it's great so far. Um...I guess I'll read the rest now.

I was frightened. The soothing voice was gone. He claimed he’d return, but that was highly unlikely. I couldn’t breathe and if I didn’t get out of here quick, I’d ...

Um. Thanks? There is a point to the prologue. It's giving the background. There will be two stories being told here. first, Xavior's. he's the leader of this "pack" of ...

ok, so the whole kything bit is in italics on where i originally wrote it. It just isn't here. Thanks for your help guys.

oh yeah...I forgot, um it was good considering I haven't even read chapter one! LOL.

Um well, it seems Sumi practically covered everything. I have to agree with her, I have absolutely no idea what a shade is, I mean I've got my own picture ...

Like a crowd of eager puppies chasing a mouse, they followed, regardless of the heat that hung over the camp like a heavy blanket. Ok I don't know, maybe it's ...

Smoke. Brimstone. Smoldering wood. Those are the things that he knew best. Those things are where he grew up. His father said he was born somewhere near the earth’s core. ...

Hi. I'm Kate, umm...totally new here...