k3pt

Interesting song (*coughs* yes, I meant song.

When I see your eyes, I make a huge smile When your with another, I break for a while "Make" isn't really effective wordchoice, here. How often would you say ...

Deep scarlet red With petals of velvet Delicate and soft Yet colored like blood This stanza was a little awkward for me. Disorganized, maybe. I believe it's the description of ...

Nice. Lacked organization, really, but that's what made it entertaining. I don't really laugh much, but I kind of chuckled a few times reading this. It becomes tedious, though, toward ...

Intriguing... ...But for some reason I was expecting an elaboration on the plot. I liked it, though. It has a sense of mystery and precision, kind of a twist on ...