justin5676

Yes, that does help. Thank you. The only reason why it's so random and confusing is because it's supposed to be. But thanks, that was some actually helpful criticism.

Can I please have some constructive criticism/critique? Thanks =]

Thank you for the reviews. And, as mentioned, it isn't exactly the standard poem, but it's the only section of the forum that it actually fit under. I would like ...

I stare at the sun, but have yet to see the light. This darkness overwhelms the little hope left inside. My sad excuse for a life spirals downwards.. Not good ...

You should do away with rhyming poetry unless you're Shakespeare. It's something that I learned the hard way. I do like the idea of this. Try to put it into ...

I do like the way that you use punctuation so the reader can read the way you want them to, but you will get corrected 23042039432 times for that on ...

BLAH! You should really specify that this is about a dance (or homecoming rather). Now that you've said that, everything makes WAYYY more sense. And, by the way, I saw ...

I wish the water was more clear,but nevermind,lovely shot. I loved the natural reflecting medium of the whole picture. Good job! ~Shine~ Yeah, the water is sort of dirty at ...

The point of the title was to make it plain. Thanks for the input though; I appreciate it =]

This was pretty decent. You have to omit some commas, in some places you have too many. Also, you said "It- he". Usually, you would say one or the other.

I like this. Surprisingly, it made me want to keep reading. Not many other people on these forums have done so. One thing that I found wrong was that you ...

I like this. Although I would read this story, it does seem a bit cliche in horror movies and/or stories. Try to make it something different than dying in a ...

Wow. This is first grade poetry. I really hope that this is a joke.

This is great; it's very well written, save for some very minor spelling, punctuation, and grammar mistakes. You captured these emotions greatly. It is as if it really happened, which ...