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that was rather amusing. pretty good too, although it often feels like a news report, but i think that was what you were aiming for. great creativity shown here, but ...

thanks for the feedback.it'll really help :D for the A small smile tugged at the corners of his lips , it was because at first the reflection looked afraid to ...

though this is good, it might've been better if you hadn't given everything away. you should've left the readers to guess at what you were hinting at. He found it ...

this IS really cool, even with the spelling mistakes and redundant words. it creates a vivid image in the reader's mind, like a sort of mini-movie playing itself out. the ...

[NOTE: The first part is the one entitled "Wings" and the second part the "Night of the Wings"] I held the frame of the window I was looking into to ...

this was nice, although i would have liked to know about the whole plot of the story. the words "super germ bug" seemed out of place to me. i dunno ...

it ends with a cliffhanger, and i kinda dig that. you need to describe their surroundings more, create a more vivid picture in the reader's head of where they are, ...

wow this site is amazing. i'm alix by the way. short for alexandra.i know it sounds like a platformer's name;).looking forward to reading great works!!

Crouching atop one of the spires of a great cathedral I surveyed the city below with great curiosity. The winds blew this way and that, gently ruffling the feathers on ...

I thought I was dreaming. The world seemed to change at a very fast pace, leaving me grasping and confused. The air had a dreamlike quality to it, like it ...