july4ruby

Hi I liked the imagery but the sentences feel incomplete. You see the reader can't exactly get the idea what your trying to convey.try using clearer sentences and join the ...

8.5/10 ....jULY....

Hi! Wow, this is ....... AMAZING. The depth,the emotions,the feelings,It says a lot about your writing.I don't know about criticism but this is the type of stories that make you ...

Hi! This is a great poem and I like that you are experimenting with various writing styles.It's a really short poem but it conveys a lot of emotion and feel ...

You and I we are the same but what exactly are we? We do not belong to reality but are found in the deepest corners of hopes dreams and wishes. ...

Sweet dreams,take me away to a place where I don't have to pretend to be something else,a better me; Where there is no one to lead me astray. Only golden ...

Thanks Emily. It is actually based on mothers day.I wrote it for my mom but i just put it here to see what others thought about it.Thanks for the wonderful ...

Delicate as the eyes that looked on me with care, or the hands whose soft touch assured me you were there. When I was a young and innocent child alone ...

What have I done? What is my crime? Is it that I am still alive? Why do you want me to change, from who I really am? Is it because ...

hi good idea..i guess.. anyways the first one was ok I guess.The second one nice rhyming,except I am trying to rack my brain for the meaning of Apocalypse The third ...

hi, I like the poem,It's really good but still I found it a little confusing too.and why did you use the phrase "her steady breathing" so much was it part ...

hi Really great.Especially the hp fans loved it.I really really enjoyed it.awesome.I think I want to read more like this.>_< Great job .........july...........

hi Dreamy! Really awesome poem.I don't think I can find anything wrong with it.I loved the rhyming and love the flow of the poem.I felt something while I was reading ...

hi litehawk! I really loved the poem! I think June and peanut have pointed out all the mistakes so there isn't much left for me to say.Anyways I am not ...

hey! I think it was great.but this line bugged me"Creatures that thrive in a six year old's mind"I know it goes with the poems central idea but the problem is ...