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Re: Cliffs of Impossibility
Dreams tumbled downward In an endless pitfall of time, Down upon a crowd of empty minds, Filling the vacuum with purpose Commensurate to the will of the soldier. In between ...
Aug 15, 2011 -
Re: The Revelations of a Skipping Stone
A gentle breeze rustled through the leaves of tranquility as the last dying rays of sunlight disappeared over the horizon. Songs of the nightingales drifted softly through the darkening air, ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: Getting Over It and Maybe you.
The very first thing that I noticed that bothered me was in the first line: "... what we could of had." You were looking for could hace or could've. I ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: Free as a Stallion am I
This was an enjoyable poem to read. I enjoyed your repetition and emphasis on dreams, but I will agree that the structure was a little confusing. Other than that, I ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: deleted
Let me start by saying that this poem really was good, so don't let anything that I mention in this comment mitigate that fact. Okay, well, one thing that kind ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: A Little Thing Called Life
Night confronted her adversary, Intrepid, A face of darkness dancing among the stars that brightened it. There he stood, Undaunted, Head blazing with the fires of Hell. Commencing words slithered ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: EDIT:Phantom of the Opera Poem
Now this is simply amazing! I can't tell you how much I loved it! :D The vocabulary was fantastic, the structure was amazing, and I fell madly in love with ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: Another One of those Darned Harry Potter Poems:)
Good piece. It summarized the series very well, and I think this would be a good crash course for those newbies to the world of Harry Potter. So, congratulations on ...
Jul 22, 2011 -
Re: Death awaits
This was a good poem. Be careful to avoid singular conjugation of verbs involving more than one thing, though. Other than that, I found nothing too in need of correction. ...
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Life's Repletion
Through the bars of posterity, He watched The shallow movements of guardianship, Watched the eternal dance of providence, Fascinated with the accompaniment of the unexpected with the mundane: The pred
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Soon
Excellent poem. It has a lot of depth to it, and that's something that I really appreciate. I loved the misery that was conveyed at the duties of a mother/ ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: Blue Oceans (1 of 2)
I loved this piece! It had a very Kate Chopin- Awakening feel to it, and seeing as that is one of my favorite pieces of literature, you can guess just ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: A Tribute to Harry Potter
This was a good poem, although it seemed a tad bit choppy. Otherwise, I loved it. ;D I absolutely love reading Harry Potter as I have grown up with it ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: And so I write.
Well, I'll agree that writing is something you can do right! One of many by the sound of it! I can't describe how much I enjoyed reading this poem, as ...
Jul 20, 2011 -
Re: Inquiry
Fists pounded on the door of peril, Demanding entrance to a world of foreign precariousness. Ignorant avidity paved the way to disclosure, Demolishing a wall of protection, The aegis meant ...
Jul 14, 2011
