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Re: In My Arms, You'll Be Safe...
So I read this a couple of days ago and thought, I should review this. So here I am. I think what we have here is a pretty cliche story, ...
Jun 27, 2014 -
Re: Pink Coats and Cottonwood Seeds
It's so tempting to just tell us what the story is about, isn't it. I mean you do all the hard work, slowly building it up and in a few ...
Jun 19, 2014 -
Re: Here and Gone (part 5.5)
Persy, where do I begin with this? There's so much to be said and if I hadn't read the disclaimer, there would be even more. I won't patronise you with ...
Jun 18, 2014 -
Re: The Perfect Thief Chapter 1
When someone approaches me directly with a request such as yours, I can only assume that due care and consideration has been taken. I can only assume that you are ...
Jun 14, 2014 -
Re: The Perfect Thief Chapter 1
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Jun 14, 2014 -
Re: The Perfect Thief Chapter 1
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Jun 14, 2014 -
Re: The Pact, Prologue
I'll give you a general impression and a couple of suggestions, because this is rather long and I'm guessing your novel will be rather long so it would be a ...
Jun 6, 2014 -
Re: The Other Side: Prologue
I'm not sure if I was in a bad mood before I read this, but there was something very irritating about it. Do you expect readers to take you seriously ...
May 27, 2014 -
Re: The Good Life - Chapter One: Losing It
You write like a woman with purpose. Which really is something. The reader gets an idea that you know exactly where the story is heading and it's apparent that the ...
May 23, 2014 -
Re: Second Always Comes Last: Baby Virgins [null]
So here's a general impression of the last couple of editions to this story. I couldn't fall into this wholeheartedly.Really great prose and fiction is hard to fault at first ...
May 21, 2014 -
Re: Invasion of Chocolate, Pt. 1
At the end of the day, you have a novel idea. That's spectacular, that's the raw ingredients for a readable story. Forget Aesthetic theory and that tenuous and slippery notion, ...
May 20, 2014 -
Re: Second Always Comes Last: Beauregard [Null]
I'm staying with this story, which is good. I think you owe the reader a little more at this stage. I mean I definitely like what you are doing with ...
May 12, 2014 -
Re: An Average Man
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Re: An Average Man
This is great, I won't do a full nit pick and there seems to be enough reviews below, so undoubtedly someone has touched upon the implausibility factor. All the same, ...
May 10, 2014 -
Re: Uhuru (Freedom.)
I'm going to be harsh, because harsh is honest and I want you to take something away from this review and if I'm not honest you won't. So here was ...
May 9, 2014