jojo48

I thought that was nicely done. I've always been a fan of substituting phrazes and words like "mauve" instead of "red". I know mauve's not really red, but you get ...

Sounds like a good start! I would just say, like the other replies, maybe a little overboard on character developement, but you've got a real heart for fantasy. And when ...

That was a great poem about love and loss. It portrays that perfectly. Have you written prose before? I think you should consider it. And this is being really critical, ...

I really liked this! Usually poems about love actually do sound sappy, but the way you wrote this one really caught my attention. It sort of flowed in it's own ...

I didn't notice any mistakes, and I'd like to hear more. It sounds like you have a comical way of writing. The only suggestion I would make if you continue ...

Winter is a sketch void of color but sharp and sure. It is also wispy like bare branches in the wind. The desolate mood is company to one such as ...

This is the prologue of the book I'm writing: Rain battered the windows of the porthole and lightning temporarily illuminated the dark sky. The girl was buried in her mother’s ...