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Great imagery, and it makes me want to know what happens next. But it sounds more like the prologue of a book rather than a poem. If you would like ...

Hey everyone! I'm a fantasy fiction fanatic in search of good books to read. If you want to get really specific, I love midieval fantasy. But if you have a ...

You know, that was really good. Simple prose works for you. There wasn't anything extremely deep or sybolic in there, but the flow was lovely. It's the perfect example of ...

The snag at the end definately caught my attention, and it sounds like you have a pretty unique story there, but it was just a little too much. It reminded ...

That was a perfect prologue. I was completely into it and the scene filled my head the whole time. That only happens to me when I'm reading something by a ...

First of all TexanWriter, I know a lot of nice prose poems don't have a clear meaning, but this one just seemed a bit like blabbering. You should define the ...

This was a pretty good begining. There are just a few thing you could change. First off, you spend too much time describing the characters. We don't need to hear ...

Well, if you want to know whether you're a good writer or not, you came to the right site. I think that's what everyone here wants to know. FYI, I'm ...

Heart broken. Dreams shattered. Soul torn in two. Say goodbye To sun and sky. The feeling’s more than you. I’m here, you’re there. Well, my body’s here. So dejected, I’ve ...

Welcome to the site! That was fairly good for your first post, but there are a few definate things you could change. First off, this could be a great story, ...

That was an amazing begining! It was perfect, and I really want to read more. I really can't think of anything wrong with it. Your long-term imagery about being at ...

First, there was a faint trace of lemon in the air. Then, she opened her eyes. A bright light stared back. But not a blinding light. This was a literal ...

Okay, I can see where you were coming from with this, but altogether this wasn't really a poem. It was more like a simple story with no feeling. You were ...

I agree with the hippie dude. War trenches and battlefields aren't the most appetizing settings to start a story with. I don't mind a war scene later on in a ...

This is through the eyes of a dog, as you can tell when you read it. It's the first of a series of unconnected little journals entries made by household ...