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I rounded the corner, back to the block with the chipped white houses and weed-patched lawns. The doors were all closed, and the sealed shutters pushed visitors away like the ...

How's this for a beginning? It ends sort of abruptly since it's just an excerpt, but I want to know how it sounds. There was a land on the farthest ...

Now the main reason this was great was because of its view point. Normally I'm not one for letters, but this was executed with a sort of grace. That is, ...

It's a short excerpt. I'd love to hear more. I haven't read the previous chapters, so I may not be the best reviewer for this. But I noticed how the ...

They were running again. It wasn't about secrecy or silence anymore. They were being closely tailed, and now the priority switched to speed. Their pursuers were coming armed with all ...

Two lovers parted by war is a very moving idea. And I like how you switched between views using the letters as a sort of bridge, if you will. But ...

I like this story, and I would be interested to see how Sam dissapeared and what happened to her. But first off, I believe you should make your first part ...

Oh man, I LOVE that idea!!! You have a great base for a story going there. Greek mythology can always be a good place to start. The only thing I ...

It's good, but the ending's a little too abrupt. Short stories still have to have spunk no matter how short they are, and this one's a bit deflated. One thing ...

Okay. Great beginning, but if this is really chapter one, then I'm a bit confused. First of, I do get the air the Cecilia is the hero of this story ...

This is the beginning of a book I want to write. Don't freak out if you read something and you have no idea what it means, because this is total ...

Great beginning. You should continue if you've got a story in mind that you like. There's one thing I'm absolutely sure about. You want us to know the place is ...

The first thing I noticed about this marvelous draft was how affectively it pulled me in. I began reading and immediately got that sense of eerie foreboding that snagged my ...

The first thing I noticed about the meaning of this poem was that it seemed like one person had all the technical stuff and the other had the musicality. I ...

This is the first part of my book that I plan to submit to a Brigham Young University writing contest. I haven't revised it yet, so please give me a ...