jesskare

I know this needs work, but I feel like I need some feedback on this before I carry on. Might be hard to follow since it's so short, but the ...

This is really cleverly done! I did notice, however, that the girl has no shadow? Apart from that, i like it :) xo

I really liked this. The idea's really fun and it's so different to anything i've ever written. One thing i noticed is you do give away quite a lot of ...

I got really into reading this, i was disappointed when it ended haha! I don't see any major problems with it, and i think it flows really well too good ...

This is good, you just need to check over your writing to make sure you haven't repeated anything :) xo

First entry, supposed to be the beginning to a short story. The idea is that it's a speech that somebody is remembering being told, hence why it's in second person. ...

I've only just joined, so still new at this...your's is actually one of the first pieces i've read. I loved it. It feels so real, and i adore your style ...