jesseatspens

It's cute, an easy read (: But I think you should try to work on the wording a bit. Some of the rhymes seemed to... I don want to say ...

Mixed believers and empty stairwells Led me to your darkened room All hearts racing, fixed emotions You held my hand, and pulled me through And we ran away from The ...

Uh, this isn't amazing. It depends how old you are, I guess. I just felt like you were searching for rhymes. They didn't sound natural, they sounded forced. It was ...

He sounds a bit.. new to poetry. It was alright, good start to him. If he keeps on, I'm sure he'll improve.

for 12? this was dec. (: all I have to say, is the paper of snow line, doesn't really make sense.

hey! anyone wanna explain this thinger to me?