jennydragonlover

mintantlers: Just b/c you're my friend doesn't mean that my review isn't going to be easy on you! It's a great beginning to a longer story--reminds me of Watership Down- ...

awesome poem! The imagery is just FANTASTIC! I love phoenixes, and this one made me think of Fawkes in Harry Potter (you know, the part where it's about to die). ...

this really is a sweet story...I feel really bad for Jene... One note: there were a couple of convention errors (ex. "hungary" instead of "hungry"). I also get the feeling ...

One late Sunday afternoon, while I was closing up, a man wearing an expensive suit walked inside and observed his surroundings. His beady eyes fell upon the displayed chess set. ...

“I owned a large toy store and it was filled with the most wonderful things. The shelves and aisles were jam-packed with the largest assortment of items: Yu-Gi-Oh trading cards, ...

Everyone makes mistakes; some mistakes are easy t’ fix and others ain’t as easy. Then again, those fancy people called sociologists or whatever they’re called say that it’s natural for ...

I agree, this poem is very beautiful. The flow of the poem seems good overall, but is compromised by the grammatical tense errors. The errors disrupt the poem's rhythm. The ...

err...not exactly what to make of this. It seems to have an okay description but the truth is this chapter has a lot of words, but doesn't actually seem to ...

[pre] Everyone makes mistakes; some mistakes are easy t’ fix and others ain’t as easy. Then again, those fancy people called sociologists or whatever they’re called say that it’s natural ...

i get those comments a lot. when I have time, i will go back and fix them. i'm thinking of doing a sequel to this. maybe the Emu: Ostrich's unrelated ...

thanks for the explanation, griffinkeeper! Just out of curiosity, what is the difference between a gryphon and a griffin? thanks a plenty![/i]

What exactly is a barrel roll and what does it look like?

thanks griffinkeeper! I'll try my best to fix the breaks. I loved your description of Chipper, oversized flying bus!

very interesting style. Hmm, no real characters...that's unusual. I'm not sure that this would be considered an actual story, but it was pretty interesting reading all the same.

very touching beginning. I really don't like sad starts but this story will eventually have a happy ending, right? Read my dragonquest excerpt if you've got time!