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Hey there Isaac! This poem has alot of potential in my opinion. I just think that the puctuation needs alot of work. The periods you have added at the end ...

This is an amazing story (well as it has been said before it isn't really a story but still good!) and it is easy to reate to. It deserves every ...

Hey Nike, this story is amazing! I think it is a really good idea for the stories main "problem". Sure there really isn't anything that catches attention yet but this ...

I think everyone has pretty much pointed out everything I saw in it error wise. I still thought it was amazing! Really. I have read poems before about our Saviour ...

Hey Sionarama! I thought this poem was really sweet. Some one out there is definitely lucky to have you feel this way about them. :) Though I do agree with ...

Hey! I did like this poem, alot actually. But just as other people have pointed out, it is in one huge chunk and not very apealing to the eye. You ...

Ahahaha it's like Gay Chicken! Just thought I'd put that out there, Scrubs is one of my favorite shows but the Gay chicken episode is one of my favorites. :) ...

I quite enjoyed this poem. :) You actually made me chuckle with the italicized texts. I think that putting those words in italics was a good idea, it makes them ...

Hello Gilded, I am here to take away that horrible feeling of a work with no comments. :) I think you have a pretty good peopm going here. I think ...

Wooooow. That is really all I can say. I am not really someone who is good at reviewing the punctuation or format but wording I can to. Your poem is ...

This isn't really a review I guess I just wanted to say that I liked this poem and it reminded me of the poem in 10 Things I Hate about ...

This is definitely a beautiful poem. I love the words you used, and how you used the. It gave me a fairly clear mental image but left something up to ...

Hey creative, welcome to YWS! I'm Jem and I will be, well, reviewing your poem. :wink: I like it. It is quite short but it has some substance to it. ...

This poem is beautiful. I can tell your feelings and your hopes, and how they aren't real. It is a sort of bittersweet peice. There is happiness but at the ...

Intertwined hands the symbol of love. Wonder where you got that from Isha... :mrgreen: Same with the slave's accent. :P Over all I really like this story, the torturing was ...