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I agree with Brad. Parts of it have potential, and I can tell you worked on this for at least a little, but you need to write about things other ...

I liked it alot. I think you should break up some of the longer lines. Quote "in magazines now, partnered to happily-ever-after cautionary tales" Should be split after the comma. ...

I agrre with Pandora and Brad. Not only does this poem need to convince us why we should rwad about you, but the lines are WAY to long. Break them ...

As the crimson sun set over the hills of Degra, the cool breeze carried the sent of blood across the Plains of Musavia on the Island of Venhue. For on ...