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I think you need to add puncuation. It will look neater,more organised, and better written. Other than that, I liked it. I don't know why, I just enjoyed reading it. ...

You really need to use proper puncuation marks. Look through the poem and find where you ask questions and put, you guessed it, question marks! Other than that I enjoyed ...

There really isn't much to say on this one except that it's very true. Keep writing because this is good. Jearjioe

Those are some pretty sick swords! I think a cross between the two woulkd look really cool. Maybe you should try it. Out of the two my favorite is the ...

You deffinatly aren't to attached. LOTR killed me too. Same with Narnia. Those series get you sucked int them and when you finish you have nothing to do. When you ...

For me it is deffenatly the Lord of the Rings series and the Redwall novels. They shaped the style of writing that I write. Also, this might sound weird but ...

If I could touch the stars, oh would your hand be mine? If I can not touch them, you are lost forever. If I could do what's right, Would you ...

Woah thats wicked cool!!!! It's good that people will now realize Africa is as old as anyother contenant and that they too were civilized at an early time. Funny how ...

hey Blackwings Yaeh I like this. Its pretty good. LOL I didn't know you wrote poetry. It makes me laugh, but not because this isn't good or anything. Keep writing ...

Trident, I think you should add to this. Simply write more stanzas. This left me on a cliff, it ended abruptly with no real ending. The tone is good and ...

You need to break u[ your lines, they're to long. A new line should start at the end of every period. Also at most commas. Put them where you would ...

HOLY Quacimoli!!! This is way to fast for a reader to understand. Who is Wildwood? Where is Firecrow's village? Is it in the montains or the desert? What does Firecrow ...

I think what you need is simply more lyrics. Add another verse and then an endtro. Other than that Iy's good.

Martico looked ahead as the crimson sun set over the hills of Degra, the cool breeze blew his hair around and blew the grass on the plains on the Island ...

I think the lines need to be broken up. Why? Because when you have to take a breath in the middle of a line it causes you to either forget ...