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Re: The Mansion Of Valour
Great story, I found it really intriguing. However, the are a few things that could be improved. Firstly, you swapped from present tense to past tense a lot, sometimes even ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: Watching the River go by: A Vampire Diary
This is a really interesting and unique story, but I have a few questions that you might like to think about to improve it. First of all, why is Siren ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: Socially Awkward
Wow, that must have been pretty awkward for you! Sounds like something I would do if a guy was flirting with me... I know you said you just posted this ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: An Eight-Year-Old's Philosophy
Kamil was the tallest person she knew, even though he was only thirteen , the second-oldest person in the shelter. I find this sentence a bit contradicting - if Kamil ...
Jul 7, 2011
