jaymee

Great story, I found it really intriguing. However, the are a few things that could be improved. Firstly, you swapped from present tense to past tense a lot, sometimes even ...

This is a really interesting and unique story, but I have a few questions that you might like to think about to improve it. First of all, why is Siren ...

Wow, that must have been pretty awkward for you! Sounds like something I would do if a guy was flirting with me... I know you said you just posted this ...

Kamil was the tallest person she knew, even though he was only thirteen , the second-oldest person in the shelter. I find this sentence a bit contradicting - if Kamil ...