jaymee

I'm writing 3, actually :) I wrote a novel last year, which I am planning on editing/re-writing, but I need some feedback first. Plus I have begun the outline for ...

Great story, I found it really intriguing. However, the are a few things that could be improved. Firstly, you swapped from present tense to past tense a lot, sometimes even ...

@Snake7 I see your point about the ending, I'm working on a better way to conclude the story, but the whole point is that spotlight is just a game, and ...

I sped through the thick undergrowth, my thudding feet and rasping breath exaggerated by the stillness of the night. Twigs and branches whipped at my face and legs, etching angry ...

This is a really interesting and unique story, but I have a few questions that you might like to think about to improve it. First of all, why is Siren ...

Wow - this poem is simply amazing! Each and every word is perfect, there is absolutely nothing wrong with it (and I'm usually very picky). Great work :)

What a beautiful poem. It's completely honest and true; the perfect words to describe a coward. Just remember, opinion only has one P. Happy writing :)

Wow, that must have been pretty awkward for you! Sounds like something I would do if a guy was flirting with me... I know you said you just posted this ...

Thanks Jelly, I'm glad you liked it :) I'm not quite sure if I'm going to continue this story, since I am working on another novel at the moment, but ...

Kamil was the tallest person she knew, even though he was only thirteen , the second-oldest person in the shelter. I find this sentence a bit contradicting - if Kamil ...

Names really are not all that important. I never actually name the characters for my short stories. When I'm writing the actual story, I just type in "John" or "Dan" ...

She looked like an angel; a dazzling beauty fallen from the heavens above. She stood tall and confident – prancing about the cathedral-like hall like a prized show pony - ...