jakfelix

Hello. I don't think this makes sense. it's quite lazily constructed as a story using a thin metaphor to disguise the fact it doesn't work. Why wouldn't he realise that ...

Hi, I think that the french is unnecessary. There is nothing obvious in the poem which makes its use meaningful or relevant except for the romantic element, which may be ...

Hi lena. I'm sorry if i was rude earlier and hope i didn't cause any real offence. I think this is a good start. I agree that the sentences are ...

Hello Saraneth. I think you could work on on the rhythm of this poem. When somethings written in this couplet style the beat of the syllables drives it and this ...

Hi Mo. Firstly i'd like to say i think this is a really nice little piece. The grammatical errors seem to have been mostly covered so i'll just tell you ...