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Re: Snogged senseless
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I've been at MIT for a while, drowning in all the technical subject matter, and hadn't revisited my poetry in ages. In light ...
Feb 11, 2009 -
Re: This Town Doesn't Have Sidewalks
The tender, childlike tone is very refreshing. However, throughout the poem, it seems like both the narrator and the companion are sharing everything, and the line "Why are you so ...
Feb 11, 2009 -
Re: Snogged senseless
The tongue’s eyes open only in a kiss. When lashes flutter closed he at last achieves sight. This intrepid explorer encounters his bliss Whilst floundering deep in the breadth of ...
Feb 11, 2009 -
Re: What a Waste... (Removed)
it was interesting...I liked the juxtaposition of the hopeful but dying Kai, and the superficially grieved Alison.... a suggestion: put your parethetical stage directions in italics also, since it mak
Nov 18, 2007 -
Re: You Got Your Wish
honestly, I didn't feel anything when I read your poem.....I infer that it is about suicide, and when dealing with such a strong topic, you should aim for producing a ...
Nov 17, 2007 -
Re: 10:23, or is it?
[pre]Look up. –Its 10:23. says the face on the wall. 10:23 itch. thirst. bored. no. maybe. tick. gut. feeling. relax. tock. antsy. leaving. almost… wait It’s all a lie. Somewhere ...
Nov 17, 2007
