jackle

Hi real cool :D i just found a few spelling mistakes that i've corrected here for you... your bellies torn open you're ripped limb from limb the zombies move closer ...

i agree with what hannah said. i dont know what else to say about this, but don't take that in a bad way. i noticed something though... Their There is ...

awesome. When i saw how long it was i thought there's no way i'm getting through all of this but then i just got addicted. I've read the fourth chapter ...

I wrote this for a grade 8 assignment and every stanza had to start with Happiness is... so it's a bit repetitive and doesn't stay on one subject too long ...

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this was really beautiful, and i know everyone's been saying that but i absolutely loved it. however and your perfect cheeky ears; i just don't know if ears can be ...

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hey this was pretty cool but the rhyming sounded a bit forced and the end was totally random, not that there's anything wrong with random. remember, in poetry it doesn't ...

hi i really liked this but... Let's get amnesia. i think you could get rid of that fullstop And go back in time To where ballroom dances Filled the dreams ...

haha this was cool. i just picked up a few mistakes and awkward-sounding sentences. They all start walking towards the tall house, every single one of them limping. Not one ...

"Let her go!" I screamed at the top of my lungs. It did not reply only stared straight into my eyes a s he first it was an it, now ...

needs more emotion. ok, she cried. tears of rage? self-pity? where is she? set the scene maybe. i like the end though. sorry thats all i have time for today

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