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Liked the biblical allusion! The AABBCC... rhyming scheme gives the poem a pretty cool and energetic rap feeling to it. Also, the lack of periods made this poem a run-on ...

Wow. This is some pretty deep stuff. Okay, here's my edit: A new dawn is approaching, its (no apostrophe for "its") light shines through my fingers. But still, a sorrowful ...

“Cool Istanbul” I see her twinkling lights across the dark wine sea; Istanbul, you’re so cool. The salty sea is your hair, long and lustrous. A black abyss of the ...

Please don't write a part 2! it's a greatshort story already and the only way to go from here is a slick spiral to the seventh realm of hell if ...

my criticism is more in line with Caligula's Launderette's. I personally think that you don't listen to what the other guys are mostly saying. I think your story is practically ...

hey, the pm about the second person problem was for Ten Years, Twenty-Eight Days: Year 2

Just wanna say good luck. The 2nd person thing feels a bit risky. I'm not sure making the reader part of the story is going to work well, and if ...

Yes, the title does sound egotistical, but I meant it to be just a big ad to attract readers, for people to say, "Hey ! Let's see how good this ...

I have a recommendation. When Lyla stares at the crow, how about you have the crow lovingly nestling her eggs. This can foreshadow Lyla's decision to keep her baby.

A way longer version of Hemingway's "Hills Like White Elephants." My God, I just had disturbing images of "Juno" and Jamie Lynn Spears. With an eighteen-year-old guy? EWWW. But this ...

deletedelete

That's right! Bow down to seniority, I'm class of '08! Gonna go to University of Washington in the fall! Sweet Seattle; senioritis sucks. Alliteration!

This actually is a real photograph. I don't consider photoshopped crap as art. And I'm not a nature photographer, so the duck and the other stuff are supposed to create ...

Lucifer is not in Genesis. If you're referring to the serpent, he's not Lucifer. Some people say that that snake is Lucifer or Satan, but the Bible doesn't says so, ...

I'm really into the ART of photography. Can someone review?