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  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Alone

    Sorry people, I have been rather tied up lately. Thank you for your review, lilymoore. I will try to make the subtle changes you pointed out. Blackbird12, I have to ...

    Jul 21, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: "I read"

    Sorry for the late reply I have been quite tied up lately. Well, I guess that's the thing about literature ( or any type of art for that matter). The ...

    Jul 21, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Alone

    I am alone. No one can see me. I am trapped in this triangular chamber - my home - for the next 9 months. I divide. Now I’m two. Four. ...

    Jun 6, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: "I read"

    Wow, I guess that was just luck then, because I really looked to "making her die" as my only idea of an ending. I didn't know what else to do! ...

    Jun 3, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: "I read"

    Thanks again for your review, Shepherd. I guess you probably understand my style better because you have read my previous one. And I do agree that it would be hard ...

    Jun 3, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: "I read"

    ultraviolet, thank you for taking the time to review. I'm glad you like the bits that you did. I meant it to grab the reader's attention. :) The capitalized letters ...

    Jun 3, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Blindumb

    Shepherd, your review was very honest and true. You are very right in that it was rushed, I did get to a writer's block half way through the story. You ...

    Jun 3, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: "I read"

    Young feet trotting towards the small iron gates. Big feet leading the way. Red balloon sleeves. Skinny hands. Tight grip to Mama's starchy finger. Mama's cotton long sleeves hiding her ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Blindumb

    max8537, I completely understand your opinion. I didn't clarify some of the things enough (who is speaking, is it still a memory or not, etc.). I will try and improve ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Blindumb

    Hey madhatter58, Thanks for your review. I'm glad you enjoyed it. The capitalization is actually intentional. It is inspired by this author, Arundhati Roy who capitalizes words in the middle ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Blindumb

    Evi, thanks a ton for your detailed review. The starting was somewhat intended to be ironic. You're right actually, I shouldn't have mentioned the dog eyes. I guess I just ...

    Jun 2, 2010
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Blindumb

    I can start this with saying cliched things like those in the books my master reads to me. “...The owls were howling in the distant night sky. It was the ...

    May 20, 2010
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: 2310 AD

    Hey Elinor, Thank you for your review. It was very honest and helpful. I am a true beginner in creative writing and I do admit that it was my first ...

    May 7, 2010
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: 2310 AD

    Hey Ten, Thank you for your feedback. Come to think of it, you are right that it is quite unrealistic that the student all agreed. I hadn't taken that into ...

    May 6, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Perfect Imperfection

    Hey Suzanne, Thanks a lot for your review. The small nit picks you pointed are very true. You have a good eye for details. And with the lemon water, hot ...

    May 6, 2010


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