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wow! i really enjoyed this! i think its really cool how you added in the other characters perspectives. also i enjoyed the point you made about her dad being murdered. ...

i like it, it doesnt really flow though. i was really confused at the part where she met the drunk guys in the park and then suddenly her dad was ...

that is so true! the only thing is if you have a crush they don't always crush back. well that's life for you. i think my favorite stanza is the ...

yikes. if a like- 20 year old wrote this i wouldnt be quite so disturbed but still disturbed. it is well written but im thirteen and i dont really think ...

okay. intresting topic. If you hadnt included the last stanza i think that i would be a lot less disturbed.... i do think that it was good how you told ...

great writing! when i first read Margot's name i thought it was magot. heheh, stupid me... Check out my book- Athwym!

i think that the way you never told the authors name really helps the story be mysterious.