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“A vampire hunter? You’re kidding right.” Despite the circumstances I couldn’t help but laugh. This guy, Rowan as he said his name was, clearly was delusional. There were no such ...

Once again, please read the spoiler before reading the rest. Thanks in advance for your reviews (: Hello there potential readers and reviewers! This is the first part of the ...

Okay I wish I could say something nice about this, but to be honest I thought this was very ordinary. Your writing style is all over the place, and to ...

Wow, that was amazing. I'm not going to pick up on grammar or anything like that, because I figure a) You don't care and b) You've probably already found the ...

please read the spoiler before reading this part of chapter 1! Okay so this is like a draft of the second part of chapter 1. As I've said with my ...

Okay so I'm not going to nitpick on grammar etc. since the people above me seem to have doen that effectively, or at least i hope so! However, I'm just ...

Okay so this has a rather interesting storyline, however I felt like towards the end it was a bit rushed. You started saying things matter-of-factly. Like when her mother was ...

Okay so to start off you really need to re-read this and fix all the mistakes. I can't really be bothered pointing all them out, but there are a lot! ...

Thanks for the review. And don't be afraid to say what you think, I'm not looking for nice comments I'm looking on ways to improve. As for the whole cliche ...

Read the spoiler first! This is only part one of the first chapter! The rest will be coming soon. That's why it finishes randomly, so don't hate on me for ...

Okay so to be totally honest with you I think this story needs a lot of work to make sure it fulfils its potential. First things first, if I were ...

Thanks for your review! This is sort of going to be the middle of the book - so a lot more will be discovered about the characters as the story ...

Okay so I like the overall feel of this, especially the eye colour thing! However, there were a few things that I would fix up to make it sound smoother ...

My breath came in short bursts as I sprinted through the darkness, trying to escape from him. My legs began to give way as I tried to force myself to ...