inkwell

The repetition is perfect. I love the way you don't just paint an image. Instead it felt like you were pouring the image out so gracefully but at the same ...

The story plot as a whole left me a little confused, but that might just be me, so don't take it too seriously. Just something to consider... Yeah I was ...

Good poem! I think you lost some of your flow and consistency in the middle of it unfortunately. I also don't understand what you were attempting to achieve by having ...

Rose pretty much said anything I would of said and put it better as well. The subject of mortality is a very narrow one and is a very personal thing ...

Wow! I totally overlooked this poem but it's fantastic! So stylized and full of tone. I love the careful word choice and the (intentional?) lack of grammar/punctuation. This poem made ...

This was.... was sad, creepy, and fairly good. However, take a look at your meter. It's something like: 5,5,6,2,6,8,5,7..... well, it's not smooth to say the least. Work on this! ...

Oh my god, I wasn't expecting such a warm welcome! Thank you everyone! So, what do you like to write? Who is/are your favourite authors? What's your favourite subject? I ...

Very pure thoughts, I enjoyed reading it. :) I like the rhyme scheme and just the genuineness of it all. Anti-semitism is completely ignorant and I really do feel sorry ...

Phew, let me take a moment to breath. :p That poem was definitely a mouthful but that doesn't make it bad. The only thing that worries me is that it ...

Hello, I am inkwell, a new member of this society. :) I have been on previous sites with similar aspirations but nothing as professional as this community here. The first ...

Better Hell ------------------------------------------- Looking up at the Moon, I say my farewell. To my knees on the floor, I fell. I reached out around me To find an instrument proper. ...

February 3rd, 2010 This is my journal: A collection of brief writings about the going-ons of my day, or any spontaneous thoughts that cross my mind and are given the ...

Besides some errors I noticed and awkwardness of your format I'd say that it was a pretty good poem. I can see more potential if you spent more time on ...

I absolutely love the contrasting poems! It's quite apparent your not an atheist, and I'll let you know that it's nothing like what you said so don't let people tell ...

You know I've always admired the poetic qualities of masks! Your poem is very full and deserves a second read. I would recommend adding a little more punctuation in some ...