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That was a profanity awesome poem! :p Thanks for giving background on the Australian lingo, it cleared some weird profanity up. I personally saw the poem as a parody of ...

Thanks everyone for the generous reviews! In response to Rob, the China part was just a reference to how everything we consume tends to be manufactured in China anyway, especially ...

Thanks Pandora! It was attempt to, as Jennya sensed, describe death and consumerism in the context of one another. To use a consumed product as a metaphor for a dead ...

"To many faces to remember." It should be "too". For one of your first poem you seem to get it. The first two lines I liked and hooked me into ...

Bareness left by the product consumed in a soporific, sepulchered card board box - folding in on itself - rewound origami - collapsing like a cheap chair bought at Walmart ...

Somebody is lucky to receive this poem! :) First stanza was excellent. Really just brought itself to life. The second stanza was good as well. The description of the eyes ...

Thanks for the crits everyone! Butter there is kind of an allusion to writer's block that I kind of intended. It was more the mood of having it than actually ...

Thanks Jagged, these are great. I particularly like Dirge without Music. Funeral Blues seems more appropriate for a spouse, which is not the case for me.

Nursing an aluminum Coke can - one quarter full, three fourths empty - replaying the pop of the tab - penetration, sigh - in my cloudy and high head while ...

This is awesome! You need to make your darks heavier and your drawing overall grittier. Are you doing it with pencil or charcoal? Charcoal or chalk might help you reach ...

Thanks for the review, you've inspired me to rework this poem. :)

Recently a close family member died and I was offered to read a verse of Biblical scripture at the funeral. I declined when informed it would be heavily religious, due ...

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Was rhyme purple using fluple, "Purple" and "fluple" don't rhyme. "Curple" and "hirple" are English words. They rhyme with "purple". "Angst" has no English word to rhyme with. :(

Your review bears the sign of a marvelous critique! (I agree with you. :p) I'm gonna make this poem read like sweet sex, just for you. Rating coming up.