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Awesome poem! Ok so I loved the first line, and the use of "hair-raising." I did not like "billion," it was phonetically annoying. I would recommend replacing it with "trillion." ...

Your images aren't showing up for me. (I'm on Safari) PM with links or some kind of alternative.

Your grammar and spelling are fine and consistent. I was confused though by the sudden shift in the tone and content of the poem. In the first half it is ...

The delicate crinkle of a Sun Chips bag, the kind that recycles, and affords no guilt and wilts like a flower - gilded and gossamer. A cloudy, brown bottle of ...

Ooh ugly strawberries, I like it more now! :) I was intending to blur the line between organic and artificial.

I loved the description of your mother and the final line! Great job.

OK so "others" should have an apostrophe because it's possessive. Everything else was brilliant! This poem is just phenomenal. The flow, repetition, structure, etc. Just really pulled me in and ...

PMed the rest of you, thanks for reviews. :) Really cool, though you are missing a period at the end of the second stanza-it's something new that I've never seen, ...

This poem seems like it's a first draft, which is not necessarily a bad thing because of the nature of this site, but I hope you don't consider this a ...

(These allow zooming in) This first one got first place in its division at my fair, which I'm proud of. :P This one's obviously a strawberry. :)

I love your poem. It is clean and well presented. I loved these lines: "(Down a block from Alpha and Omega and to the left towards Christianity)" The humor and ...

This poem is experimental for me in that I've never done anything like it. Virtually every word is derived from either George W. Bush's address on 9/11, or Deuteronomy 6 ...

I liked your poem but some poetic descriptions of the sanctuary and your heart might serve it well. Somehow try to make the poem more than the sum of its ...

"But I have choices..." This lines was awesome! Just the simple wording, and the way it came like a declaration of resolve mixed with sadness and curiosity. I think if ...

Neat poem. It is like you said a little thought (about a big thing) in poetic form. I would have like to get more than just vague questions (i.e. more ...