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Re: Life Beyond School
Don't stress. Or at least not more than you have to. I must of doodled on half my AP exams. Biggest waste of money in my life. But hell, anything ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: Big Books for Big Free Time!
Now that it's Summer, most of us in school are on break! This means a lot of free time to do nothing other than read big books. :) This list ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: I Forget My Age.
I forget my age, sometimes- I can feel it drifting from me, as if my whole life is not crucified on the T of a one, What is the T ...
May 25, 2011 -
Re: Bullets of Peace
I'm impressed with your short story! At first I thought the past story was a bit overly sensational, but it provided a good contrast with the archaeologists. Both stories had ...
May 24, 2011 -
Re: Blue Cello
Hey Kat! I wanted to address your review in-forum because it had some suggested revisions. I know what you mean with "regaled" but it fits from the story perspective. I ...
May 21, 2011 -
Re: My Beautiful World
EEEEEEEEK!!!! I think you have made a common, but tragic mistake with your poem. There is hardly any punctuation! Now, to be fair, you COULD have done this for effect. ...
May 21, 2011 -
Re: Blue Cello
Thank you all for the comments/reviews! You've all been sent personal messages. :)
May 19, 2011 -
Re: First Love
The spaces after before the end-line punctuation are annoying, distracting, and inappropriate. Besides that, this is a good poem for being 14. I particularly liked the personification of your words, ...
May 17, 2011 -
Re: Blue Cello
Palindromic memories meandered from the blue cello's plangent, hollow heart. The warmth of anonymous listeners regaled the artist, fomenting an incipient encore - cursory jots in the marginalia of his
May 17, 2011 -
Re: Because I'm a Christian
Having verbally mocked many Christians in my life, this was a little hard to read. Parts were silly, without actually making me laugh, parts were odd, and made me want ...
May 4, 2011 -
Re: Sunday Evening
@ Lavi: I intended to use the word "stoke" unless you're making merely a suggestion in which case I won't be changing it. (Thank you though!) :p Thank you pen ...
May 2, 2011 -
Re: Stroll (With a Stranger)
Thanks for the reviews! Just want to bring light to the subject. I was hoping that the title would illuminate it but I'm biased. :p The poem is about me ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: How does one add spacing in front of a line?
Thanks! I didn't know they offer the same color as the background.
Apr 30, 2011 -
Re: Running through the Beach
That's absolutely beautiful! If there's one thing I don't like though, it's the shadows coming from the edges, specifically corners. They overwhelm the image, make it too dramatic, and detract ...
Apr 30, 2011 -
Re: Trust
Well done! I like the repetition. This makes a nice mantra for you when dealing with your "friends" I bet. :) Not much to critique here.
Apr 30, 2011
