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I want to add more, but I'm afraid no one is reading it, heh.

For those of you who missed the cue, the first part takes place well after the second. His condition is he's dead :-P That's why everyone ignores him. The first ...

Heh, I think a few of you missed the boat. Check the dates... particularly the dates of part one, and the date of the accident.

I live in America, lad.

Thanks guys! No rip apart artists? I was kinda looking forward to that.

I always hated cummings, but nice job imitating his style. Only imitating, never duplicating, of course =)

Jerry Tomlin came awake slowly. The sunlight sneaking in through the slats of his bedroom window's blinds made golden-white crosscuts vertically down his face, and two ultrabright beams fell right ...

Wonderful piece, no criticism from me. I love how you made hiding one's true self into an art form with all the artistic medium metaphors.

The only criticism I have is that the imagery seems a tad overdone, and so a lot of it runs together. Otherwise, very sweet, I love how so many things ...

I loved the quick, restless form this piece took, it really set the mood and brought across your point, which I feel is that the typical comforts and inspirations that ...

I agree with the one who said the point was kinda lost on making it first person instead of third, that sudden shift was too abrupt. Other than that, I ...

The long slow drag burned, but he enjoyed it. Not trying to look cool, or calm down, smoking was just another symbol of his rebellion from the establishment he once ...

Name: Jon Parker Age: 16 gender: male power: manipulates time personality: tries to be witty, kind of annoying, seems to be a little too proud. Nerd who has been rehabilitated ...

The nick is just another reason for him to hate his parents, it's not like he accepts it, heh.

Name: Zack Parker Superhero nickname: Zap Age: 16 gender: male power: can store and release tremendous amounts of kinetic energy personality: sarcastic and cynical. He always feels like he got ...