ibelieve_inme

Well maybe you could tell me how YOU would write it, because if its good enough to receive an award-twice, may I add-then Im not going to be too quick ...

Before you read the revised version, let me explain-somewhat-what this is about. Recently, A friend I knew, and was quite close to, died. Her boyfriend was the scariest, most manipulative, ...

its not really my sister as in blood related. She's my best friend and has been for so long we call eachother sisters. So, i didnt see it as weird. ...

Humorous...yet expressive nice

i just had a new baby, and i totally agree with this. Good job in capturing the reality.

Oh my goodness this is wonderful! I love your imagery and I understand it...which says something haha. Beautiful, by the way.

I love it. LOVE it. and who cares if its not perfect (whos to say that anyways?) its good, and if SOMEONE likes it, then its a success.

oh yes, i know that feeling! peaches are great. But hey, i get what you are trying to get across- he misses her. so sad, love is. good work.

the "tone holes" threw me off too, because the rest of the poem is so deep in erotic feelings...or at least thats what you want us to think, right? I ...

Wow...that all I can say. I love it, thats for sure. But I'm also sorry for your loss. You are a good writer though, even in times of sadness, which ...

one of my favorite photos of mine. this is my sister. i have more to post, but i have to get them all on one thing. idk how - but ...

self portrait? it kinda looks like you. Love the work - keep it up

he(she?) looks like he sees something i the distance...he looks very interested. you should draw what he sees. Imagination my frined, is key lol. Love the work tho

love them! they crack me up. *Smiles* thnx

thanks both for your comments...I'll keep them in mind for my future works...this was just rough draft anyways..but i won a poetry contest with it, so i kept it as ...