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Re: Now and next to now
I really like this :) There's not really anything for me to suggest. It was very clear, and it was easy to know what you were talking about. Plus, I ...
Dec 14, 2009 -
Re: Chloe
Things were bad, but nobody knew. She didn’t seem sad, we didn’t have a clue. But things fell apart on that horrible day. She’d been stabbed in the heart, she ...
Dec 11, 2009 -
Re: The YWS 2009 Yearbook
I joined YWS in October, but it feels so much longer than 2 months! I googled "young writer club" and YWS came up. It sounded official, and it looked nice, ...
Dec 10, 2009 -
Re: Battle
Prepare your arms for many embrace, that’s what it takes to finish this race. You call it “life,” but I call it “battle,” so cock your guns and clean your ...
Dec 10, 2009 -
Re: Hero - edit
Wow! I didn't see that coming! This is really good, but it sometimes has a couple sentences that don't flow very well. I can't give you an example because my ...
Nov 24, 2009 -
Re: My backyard
Ooh, pretty! I really like the circles that the light makes in the first one.. The second one was a little blurry, and a little too common. It's those one-of-a-kind ...
Nov 23, 2009 -
Re: That magic - A short story.
I wrote this in poem form, but I think short story explains it better... tell me what you think, and anything you think could improve it :) I sit, quietly. ...
Nov 23, 2009 -
Re: I love my Music.
This is great! The only things I see are: 1) Why is 1 eye bigger than the other? Is she upposed to be confused? If so, how come? 2) Did ...
Nov 22, 2009 -
Re: Bring back the Warmth
This is my first poem, but tear it apart :) Where did it go? Why can’t I feel it? The magic is gone; That special one. The one that sends ...
Nov 22, 2009 -
Re: Cloaked figure
This is very good! How old is she? She seems to be young, but very serious. Kind of like she is more mature in her head than it seems. I ...
Nov 15, 2009 -
Re: YWS Radio on November 15, 2009!
Aw, that sucks about the webcam thing, but this is going to be great! I'm going to set my cell phone to remind me! Like Mia asked, will we be ...
Nov 15, 2009 -
Re: What I see from just my front door.
Hi! :) I love your pictures! The flowers, while they are bright and vibrant, are very common. I fell in love with the first 2 of the rickety old house. ...
Nov 15, 2009 -
Re: The First of Spring
June, these are excellent pictures! My favorites are the Pine Tree Silhouette, and the Window. I like how they are dark, and sort of mysterious, but still very recognizable. I ...
Nov 15, 2009 -
Re: A Whispered Secret - Chapter 1 *Arrival* (Revised Chapter!)
Okay, I posted my first chapter on YWS, and I knew something ws lacking. Luckily, I have my peeps on YWS to tell what I was missing. I did as ...
Nov 15, 2009 -
Re: No title (suggestions welcome)
I really liked this, but there isn't enough to leave a tear-it-apart review. Well I’m not like any of these silly girls who just sit around twiddling their thumbs waiting ...
Nov 15, 2009
