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hey, thanks for the review. i initially intended this to be a light read without much to the plot, but your review made me realize that without character development, action ...

also, your suggestion on a slow deterioration of Adre's condition is an extremely good idea. i'm going to work it into the rewrite.

wow, thanks for the in-depth review. i'll hit on some of the bigger points you made. the main protagonist is referred to as "the soldier" because, when he made the ...

phenomenal :0 thank you! i tried hard to make the connection between Karlya and Adre, so that Adre's motivation later on is believable. and yeah, i don't like grammar mistakes, ...

i've fixed the formatting, and italicizing Hades' dialogue is an excellent idea, thanks. i'm working on a story where characters communicate via internal communications (like cybernetic telepathy) and

aye, for some reason when i copy-pasted the story into the text editor, it came out like that and i was having trouble finding the "edit works" button. i'm glad ...

i'll re submit it chapter by chapter after i've done editing to the first two.

:0 i'm being serious too. and thanks very much!

*returned*

really? :3 i got emotional writing Adre's reaction to seeing her body, so i'm glad i got an emotional response from a reader.

well i'm glad you enjoyed the first two paragraphs. the violence is just part of my writing style, i enjoy being graphic, and i feel the soldier's bloodlust is integral ...

Absolutely.