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yes, that was Adam's internal dialogue recounting Adre's words. i'm learning and developing prose as i go, and the fact that i failed freshman English doesn't help much. to me ...

yes, that was Adam's internal dialogue recounting Adre's words. i'm learning and developing prose as i go, and the fact that i failed freshman English doesn't help much. to me ...

you think it's sad? i guess it is, though it's meant tongue-in-cheek. anyway, since i'm getting so much positive feedback i'll come clean and admit that i thought this story ...

about the plot. if you read the original drafts (the ones that don't say rewrite), you'll find this story was originally just an excuse for me to write gory, excessive ...

hey, thanks for pointing those out spelling errors. i haven't gone over this story in a while and had no idea it contained so many typos. and yes, i have ...

i'm genuinely excited about it. this piece speaks to my more deviant nature, the part of me that enjoys dark humor and discussing taboo subjects. this story lays extremely taboo ...

well, reading that made me smile. thanks so much.

well, i'm going to have to disagree with your other reviewers. this story definitely had some gory, sickening scenery, but i think it was used to little effect. now i'll ...

wow, so THAT'S where the periods go. i failed freshmen English so i'm actually pretty uninformed when it comes to grammar and sentence structure. i'll be sure to fix that ...

ah ok, i was very tired when i read and reviewed this and i guess my reading comprehension was suffering. still i stick by all my compliments, i really loved ...

heh, i do that all the time cause i websurf on a phone. i'm glad you liked the story, the first half of chapter 1 is up i think... it'll ...

i set it so far in the future because i didn't think cyborgs would be around til then. the .50 caliber rifle is the largest round currently in production world-wide ...

^-^ kk!

hey thankies much for the review! i've already begun editing this chapter so that a. you only get Alexis' pov and b. we get more of a backstory and personality ...

hey, thanks for the review. i'm going to do another draft of this first chapter and try to make my characters memorable and meaningful.