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No. The body would be taken. Immediately. By paramedics. No right-thinking doctor would leave a dead body in a room. It's too dangerous and it's just not right. Unless they ...

Thankyou for your advice. How about if I was to change the beggining so that Mrs Jackson stays in the room with her, then when Alyssa starts pounding the body ...

What are you supposed to do when you arrive back to the room you share with three other girls, and arrive inside only to find your best friend lying on ...

Teacher, five children, they hurt me They say it’s my fault that I’m black They said I was wicked, a sin against God What do I do, fight back? Daddy, ...

She was lost. Lost in a new town, with no knowing which way was forward and which way was back. And still, new town or old town, it was close ...

OMG! That is so cool. It's like, amazing cool. Thankyou *huggle*

Hiya, Hippygirl. As I promised, I returned. Now, that I am fully rested, let's have a look shall we? :) I re-read your whole story, and I must say, when ...

Despite my being almost-but-not-quite completely lost...I will try to help. How could you improve it? Well, with more description, perhaps. Amala sat in the large, almost royal looking library, watchi

Despite my being almost-but-not-quite completely lost...I will try to help. How could you improve it? Well, with more description, perhaps. Amala sat in the large, almost royal looking library, watchi

Despite my being almost-but-not-quite completely lost...I will try to help. How could you improve it? Well, with more description, perhaps. Amala sat in the large, almost royal looking library, watchi

Please all comments and criticism welcome Chapter 13 No one had spoken for the past two hours. The air was filled with silent feelings of hurt and despair, just waiting ...

8/10 i luv the 1st bit

Thanks so much you lot :lots_hearts:

5/10