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Re: Our Dance
I thought this was really cute, very relatable. It was short, and with more work I think it could have a more powerful effect and be brilliant! Other than that ...
Mar 19, 2010 -
Re: What random thing did you do today?
Today my friend informed me that French women spend 38% of the day naked. Apparently it's fact, but I find that doubtful. ps. I did not mean to offend any ...
Mar 15, 2010 -
Re: Message in a Bottle(edited)
Hey! I love the simplicity, and found it very relatable. I wish it rhymed here and there, or maybe an alliteration or two. Other than that I enjoyed it. Love ...
Mar 15, 2010 -
Re: Lucas Said
"Emily" he said. Though he was talking to me. "Emily" he said. Through faded eyes that could not see behind the invisibility. "Emily" he said to me, and I just ...
Mar 15, 2010 -
Re: Here We Go Again
Hey! I absolutely loved this. I can always tell when I really like lyrics is when I wish I could hear the music played with them! Love and all that ...
Mar 4, 2010 -
Re: Don't Let Go - a song dedicated to my Haitian orphans
This is simply brilliant. I was nearly moved to tears when I read it. It's people like you who change the world one step at a time. I thank you ...
Feb 25, 2010 -
Re: I'll Wait
Hey! I really liked this. It kind of had a "Dear John" feel to it, and maybe that is just because I'm in the middle of reading that book ha ...
Feb 20, 2010 -
Re: Don't Let Go
I have no intentions of portraying a Julius Caesar essence here, but there is a forum dedicated to lyrics. I would put this there, because it is simply brilliant. I ...
Feb 15, 2010 -
Re: My Pale December
I'd like to say in advance that I thank Bloc Party (the song "Signs" in particular) for giving me inspiration. . enjoy :) Your tongue, is a like a new ...
Feb 15, 2010 -
Re: Secrets
Hey! Thanks to everyone! This is my first song so I was a little worried about the feedback, but you all have been very helpful. :) Black Wind: Thank you ...
Feb 7, 2010 -
Re: Little Bird
Hey! 1st off welcome to YWS. 2nd, I absolutely loved this! It was short and sweet. The little bird concept was very relatable, which is always great in poetry. I ...
Feb 1, 2010 -
Re: Secrets
It Loves You There's a morning glory in my pocket that shines a brilliant purple. It wants you more and more. It loves you. There's a smile encased in my ...
Jan 31, 2010 -
Re: Gravity
Enormity How I'm drawn to you. How I used to love you, yet you never loved me. Am I mean? Do you find my idiosyncrasies ugly? Is my complexion only ...
Jan 25, 2010 -
Re: Hint
Hey! Welcome to YSW. Nit-picks. I don't feel that every line has to be capitalized and/or end with a period. Some lines can just end with a comma or the ...
Jan 25, 2010 -
Re: You know you're a writer when...
Story of my life.. Characters become your very best friend – and they’re not even alive! When you counter and literally argue that said characters are indeed alive. Just because ...
Jan 22, 2010
