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This is a good start to something; got a lot of potential. Like the people before me, I'm wondering who 'he' is, why she can't listen to music, more on ...

Uh, this is just a quick response (will do a good, full lengther later). The thing that struck me most was that they all spoke like they were in a ...

OK, I know this is an extract and all, but... well, I'm in the dark as to what's going on. I mean, I can get some parts, its just that ...

You should consider making this into a true short film! It would be awesomesauceome. Eliza: (Poofs into the meadow in a cloud of purple smoke and looks around.) Um… Where ...

I guess... 8/10? Its one of those things you'd find in an emotional book... :') (Heartwarming)

I guess... 8/10?

I’m back in the car, onyx wheel in front of me. A girl is sitting next to me; I know her. My sister, Tiffany. “Oz, where’s Beta?” she whines. I ...

Right. This is a goodish work, but it's a bit cliched. Evil aliens! Thirst for vengeance! Normal kid turns hero! Maybe if it were like that movie, I forget the ...

Alright. I think that its... OK, good even, but I was not really sure if I liked it or not. The story idea is good (or has potential), but I ...

The world hates us, Persecution, We are alone, We survive for, As long as we can, But one day... We will, Rise above them, Crush them down, Down to the ...

OooooKaaaay. I'd like to ask, what is going on here? Is this a world war (through the railroad tracks and stuff), or is it a... what? I didn't exactly understand ...

This is part one, so it doesn't kick off that much until the next part (if I decide to continue). If you think it is awful, I will instantly forget ...

I think that there is no such thing as a perfect character due to the fact that any perfect character will be despised by the reader: For example, I was ...

I have this thing that always gets to me; I read something, and then the bombshell is dropped, and (I don't guess it) but I just go 'O-oh, so that's ...

I think... Melody (like, something bright and happy) Abilyn (a name that is Erin and Abigail smashed together) Tatiana or Anya (short for Anastashia)? (I just like those names; they ...