heath

hi, and welcome to yws! i enjoyed your story, and it has some good role models in it. however, as i do with every story, i have some qualms ( ...

this is a whirlwind of action that immediately sweeps you along once you start reading. it is a patchwork scenes that cause the audience to ask questions and does deserve ...

you seem to have a talent for introductions and detail. your writing immediately sucked me in and i could imagine the scenery quite vividly. there were some grammar mistakes that, ...

i admire your writing of this and the cast of characters that you've assembled, and will wait excitedly for the next chapter. you do have some grammatical and spelling mistakes, ...

this poem ( although if it is personal, please excuse me ) has a concept that's a little tricky to write about, since it's been done so many times it's ...

this was a very interesting and well-written poem. a lot of poems put emotions and backstories straight out there, but this one makes you think. what happened here? what is ...

sorry about this late review, but i saw this in my recommended-for-you list and it looked interesting. i do not regret clicking it: this is a very good start, and ...

i'm a sucker for historical settings. like, anything about a time period before 1950 i will jump on. so, i'm really pumped for the the next chapters, because you've given ...

going to go into nitpick mode just for a few moments, to take out the bits that can easily be avoided and don't affect the reading all too much: - ...