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Re: After Last Night
Hi There. I really like the way it rhymes. specially how you've incorporated rhymes into the same line. 'Story, Glory', 'word, hummingbird'. I totally, loved this.. So the first two ...
Oct 30, 2014 -
Re: Free Write Friday
Hi There. First of all, I think you just related to 75% of the average teenage population, me being the top of the list. I just finished with school, all ...
Oct 30, 2014 -
Re: Sardines
Hiya.. So what I really absolutely loved about the piece was the complete change of feeling from the beginning to end. The description of the accident was so precise that ...
Sep 12, 2014 -
Re: Little does he know
Hi there. So overall I think you've done a good job. The thought was clear and the flow was almost perfect. I only have two small nitpicks. In the fourth ...
Sep 12, 2014 -
Re: Puzzle Pieces
Hi there. I am in love with this.. It is so heartbreaking in way. In a good way. You know it's the kind of piece where you keep hoping that ...
Sep 12, 2014 -
Re: dancers
Hi there.. So this was hands-down one of the best romantic poetry I've read in some time. The imagery you created was just beautiful. And the way you've shown the ...
Sep 12, 2014 -
Re: The Cold Wind of Death
Hi there. Okay, so I have no nitpicks! None at all! I totally love this! I could actually feel what you've written. my grandfather's pretty sick too, so I could ...
Sep 11, 2014 -
Re: The Plea Of The Innocent
Hi There! So this is a really nice poem.. I love the theme and it is especially close to my heart. I'm a law student, and cases of innocent people ...
Sep 4, 2014 -
Re: Always and Forever
Hi there. First off, welcome to YWS! You'll love it here. You're gonna meet so many people here who are just like you. This place is addictive. Coming to your ...
Sep 3, 2014 -
Re: After You- Prologue
Hiya. Okay, so this is actually really good! I think what I loved the most about this whole thing was that it was short, concise and caught my attention from ...
Sep 3, 2014 -
Re: The Story of a Boy with One Eye
Hi there Gaurav! First of all I want to tell you that you are the 4th Gaurav I've met! And you can start dancing with joy at the fact that ...
Sep 3, 2014 -
Re: A Hymn to Space
Hi There. I'll start of by saying that this was really good and very well written. I do have a few suggestions, so please bear with me. "a hymn to ...
Feb 28, 2014 -
Re: Just another love poem
Hi there. First of all I must say this is good. I personally really like it. I think everyone interprets a poem differently. My interpretation was that you were trying ...
Feb 28, 2014 -
Re: Growing Up Beside You
Hi There. Let me start off by saying that for a first poem, this is really good. It's fun to read, and thumbs up for that. I had two things ...
Feb 23, 2014 -
Re: Good days
Hello There. Well, this is really good. It's powerful and really draws the reader in. It flows really well. I felt that the last stanza had an optimistic tone. Maybe ...
Feb 23, 2014
