hannahbelle214

Okay first of all you have a really got plot but it still needs some work. The part about veiwing the Effiel tower should be changed to maybe looking at ...

You did okay, but this could use a-lot of revising. I like how you compared the 17th year like a butterfly starting as a caterpillar as a baby then going ...

Okay, this could be really good, and is really good, but you need to fix a-lot of things. You need more expresion pulled into yuor writing and characters. “Okay,” she ...

I love the plot line and how beautifully your story is written. The conversaion is really brought in the story. The characters have a lot of potential. You should probably ...

I love the way you write and how you set your story and characters up. But what I realize in new writers is that they get so excited with writing, ...