hannahbelle214

Here is my story rewritten and some parts added. After reading can somebpdy answer my questions below? thanks! Annabelle September 27, 1901 I crossed my arms with glum, while looking ...

Thank you JetPack so much. I know the names are similar of anne and annabel but I am still trying to pick the perfect name for Annabele so I just ...

Annabelle I up thrust my head soaringly, with morose, while looking through the myriad of boxes of the new bibles in my refined parlor. Pouting about needing to make bookmarks ...

Your story seems to be really good, I love the descrpitions but it is still kind of confusing, please go back and fix it. This coulld be really good.

Okay first of all you have a really got plot but it still needs some work. The part about veiwing the Effiel tower should be changed to maybe looking at ...

Aaron Lure, a bachelor, age twenty one and a half, was a nosy boy, with thick light brown hair kept at his ear. He dressed in clean church clothes but ...

You did okay, but this could use a-lot of revising. I like how you compared the 17th year like a butterfly starting as a caterpillar as a baby then going ...

Okay, this could be really good, and is really good, but you need to fix a-lot of things. You need more expresion pulled into yuor writing and characters. “Okay,” she ...

I watched the hills go by and heard the snore of the old cobbler in the coach. The bumps of the wheels hitting the rocks made me shiver and shivering ...

I love the plot line and how beautifully your story is written. The conversaion is really brought in the story. The characters have a lot of potential. You should probably ...

I love the way you write and how you set your story and characters up. But what I realize in new writers is that they get so excited with writing, ...

Hi I'm new here and I like to write old western romance and historicaal fiction, and sometimes mysteries. I have a few questions. How do I review somebody's work, and ...