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A trickle of water dripped upon the stone, echoing through the prison. What echoes through the prison? Specify. An odour trailed in through the cell bars, passing under Seridon’s nose. ...

Coolness and awe. *hugs Nate, hugs Big Brother*

Short and sweet, love. I agree with Firestarter in regards to the repetition of "let's leave," but you have great word images and even a little alliteration, which makes bird ...

A very intriguing start you have here darling, and it definitely hooked me in and kept me reading. One piece of advice I'd offer, and I'm sure you've heard this ...

Is there a reason why Republic isn't up there? Anyway, that's my vote (sorry if this has been covered already). Also: Also, capitalism cannot be an option as it isn't ...

"For right now, I've generally reached them." ~Tannar "Insanity, mostly. Instability, a driving thirst for vengeance. If I were to be brutally honest." ~Danteel "Mostly my own hesitancy and fear." ...

Incredible, darling, and moving. The most impressive part, at least to me, was the way you managed to portray believable, even heart-breaking grief without being cliche or making your readers ...

Wonderful, Nate! *hugs* You're my hero! (I personally like the black, but even so it's nice to have the option.)

Danteel looked through the shuttle viewport as the mottled blues, greens, and whites of Locus Nova grew steadily closer and clearer. He glanced across the small cabin to Moncreif, who ...

...um, I realize bumping one's threads is bad form, but is no one going to take a look? I'd feel a total dork posting the next bit before this has ...

Tybalt rocks. That is all you need to know. ;) Seriously, though, how can I help? I'm not exactly an expert but I do have a deep and abiding love ...

Hmm, I'll admit I'm intrigued. You have a distinct style, darling, not many people can do that kind of wide-scope 3ed-person omniscient voice. One bit of advice--you might want to ...

*changed to rated R Also, you might want to stick more spaces between your paragraphs, darling, right now they're rather difficult to distinguish/read.

:D Yay! I always knew Nate would be in the papers.

Hey there, JuniorLegacy, and welcome to YWS! Like Sythe said, the Rules require you to do two reviews of other people's work before you post your own. If you have ...