gyrfalcon

the affects were devastating Should be "effects" cultured by the dark, wet, landscape and even damper spirits This is mostly just my opinion, but when you use that kind of ...

- - - Thank you all for your input! Since I'm currently shopping this story around at different literary magazines, I thought it prudent to remove it from this site. ...

"In an instant." ~Danteel "For certain people, yes." ~Tannar "Of course." ~Karenna "I want to say 'yes,' who wouldn't want to, but I don't yet know anyone I care for ...

"I prefer black, something subtle and close-fitting but not constricting that allows me ease of movement." ~Danteel "Clothes? I don't really think about them unless there's some great occasion, in ...

"Am I in the crash alone? Was I driving by myself or did I have passengers? I'd have to check on them first. Then I'd drag myself out of the ...

by many people from a myriad of lands Gah! It's a temple, and if I'm not much mistaken, it's a god who's talking! Bigger, grander! No god likes to think ...

The midnight of the end I know what you mean, and it's a fantastic image, but the wording is a bit awkward and makes the reader trip a bit--maybe smooth ...

Hey there! A very solid little review--where are you getting this published? Overall, there were very few problems, I just spotted a few things you might want to modify? Explain ...

Hey there, welcome to YWS! I'm glad you're taking reviews well and are eager to learn--looks like you're going to be a great addition here! My name's gyrfalcon, I'm a ...

You know you're a writer when you're in the middle of reading your history homework, and have to stop and geek out for half an hour because the textbook has ...

Thanks so much, you guys. Thank you so much.

Hey there! Cool statement, dude, I hope I can be helpful here. Okay, first, you might want to remove your full name from it, just a safety measure, you understand. ...

I really like the format and style of this poem, mizz-iceberg, but like darky.demark I'm a little puzzled by the use of the "of"--without a subject for that preposition, the ...

Hello YWS. It's been...a very long time. And that's my fault. And I am so sorry. I don't deserve the green color to my name--I've done nothing, in months , ...

This is fantastic! I've got two pieces in the works--gonna have to choose one before too long!