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(cont.) Don't forget, you asked for it! Now, forced by the rain to seek refuge in the sewers, he was going back home to where he’d left him. Question: Why ...

Here we go! Note: as my review is really, frighteningly long, I’m going to split it into two posts so that you don’t strain your eyes overmuch. ;) The boy ...

"Avarn, definitely. I could never put up with everything he has to put up with." ~Tannar "Ditto." ~Karenna "Admire? My father. The fact that he's managed to make so much ...

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Btw, are you going to put the whole thing up again? Is that allowed? I was worried about that myself, but I checked with Suzanne and she said to go ...

'cmon, people, bring it on!

Chapter Three “Elementals are, as you know, the source and the beginning of magic in our world.” Karenna sat with her head in her hands, listening in bored dismay to ...

Lovely, darling, truly--I really enjoyed it. A great rhythm, good subject matter, wonderful word choice. I must say, though, that the "mi' mates" thing threw me off--you'd just used quotation ...

"Pause in shock for a moment. Laugh uncontrollably for awhile. Then go pay bail, cracking jokes at them for the next 5 years about it." ~Tannar "Find out the truth." ...

Oh I love it! *rolls on the ground, choking with laughter* You should do one about "Uthred: Sanctum's No. 1 Ladies' Man." ;)

(continued) Gearson asked the question “so, who’s next on the list?” but was only disappointed. Okay, I’m not sure why Gearson was disappointed but it only confused me and doesn’t ...

Okay, here we go! (I really did do the whole thing this time, but as it's so huge, I'm separating it into different posts). Here's a sort of key in ...

Okay, here we go: I usheathed my dagger Typo—“unsheathed” I had to do something. I must. This may just be personal taste, but I think the second sentence might have ...

Chapter Two As Karenna clambered out of the wagon into the main Academé courtyard, she marveled at the sheer size of the place. The buildings were made of giant blocks ...

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